Re: Poppy beat poet symmetry
Kiki, on host 208.151.220.100
Tuesday, November 28, 2000, at 11:21:06
Re: Poppy beat poet symmetry posted by Nyperold on Tuesday, November 28, 2000, at 09:03:37:
> > > > Speaking of poetry, I wrote two new ones, which is good cause i hadn't had any inspiration since August and I was getting worried and they're good poems! Anyone care for me to post? > > > > > > > > Ki"conspiracy? I think not..."ki > > > > > > Kiki! Need you even ask.... YES! POST! PLEASE DO! > > > > > > :-) > > > > Well then... Neither has a title as of yet, and neither of the two people who have read them has been able to tell what they were about... but I like them. Any comments are welcome.... although if they're of any deep nature, I'd prefer them to be emailed. > > > > Poem#1 > > > > An impenetrable fortress > > Falls > > Leaving an idyllic world > > In shambles > > The city rebuilt > > Will never be as strong > > The new walls - > > Needed to keep out > > The savage unknown > > And therefore > > Hastily erected - > > Are weaker > > More easily breached > > Eventually > > That which is left > > Is not worth > > The energy of rebuilding > > And a once respected citadel > > Decays > > > > Unless > > The time is taken > > To prevent new weakness > > And old faults > > Are corrected > > And long-term growth > > Is placed before > > Short-term safety > > > > But who has time > > To bother with that? > > > > > > Poem#2 > > > > Forgiveness and trust > > Are entirely different things > > Quintessentially Pandora > > The untouchable is touched > > Raving demons released > > To the leer > > Of the punishing world. > > What's done is done. > > Yes, > > But can you > > Will you forget? > > Grasp for the one > > Beam of hope > > Did it fly away > > With the rest? > > Was it ever there at all? > > The apple has browned > > The shadows lengthen > > Our appointment ends > > Unless you call them back > > Is it too late > > For a simple apology? > > > > > > Ki"poetess"ki > > I understand those. At least, I think I do. :) Very well written. > > Nyperold
I'd be interested to know what you think they're about.... I've gotten LOTS of different answers so far... and by lots I mean, well, two, but I'd be interested.
Ki"at the folger"ki
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