Re: A story (warning: may be a bit depressing)
Sakura, on host 141.150.244.236
Thursday, May 3, 2001, at 17:27:34
Re: A story (warning: may be a bit depressing) posted by MissyClar on Thursday, May 3, 2001, at 15:33:29:
> When I first read the "sticks and stones" phrase I went through some english class induced revulsion at the cliche, but then you used it very nicely! That was my favorite part, in fact - how you used that as a way of tying the story together and building to when she used it as a suicide note. If you were to expand it, however, I think it would be nice if the sister had an epiphany when she saw that the protagonist is dead. But then again, that sort of thing is rather cliched. *revulsion*
Exactly why I put the second message at the end. I finally realized that I think I was trying to write a worst-case scenario. Again, don't ask me why. I really don't know how my mind works...
Saku"Still, it didn't turn out too badly. Thanks for the input, everyone!"ra
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