> This one is a trillion times better than my first.

I wouldn't have believed it. But, yes. This one /is/ a trillion times better than the last one. It flows very nicely and is very "spiritual" (for lack of a better word).

I'm too tired right now to go through this stylistically the way I did with the last one (maybe Saturday afternoon I'll get a chance...it takes at least 30 minutes), but it looks much better in that department as well. I can say with certainty that there are no spelling errors, and no obvious grammatical problems.

While there may be ways the essay could be improved, I would say offhand that if you sent this in "as is", it would almost certainly get you into whatever liberal arts college you're applying for.

>So, yet another first draft for the essay I truly will send in.
>
> (500 word limit... question: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.)

Hey, you've got seven more words you can use! I was never that good at this. I would have been lucky to get within fifty.

Good night!

-SB