> Alright, famous said I could....:)
> I'll post a few poems first....

Ah! My permission was all you needed?


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> Red #5
>
> Rust red hair frames her pale sick face,
> Her mother let her leave the house that way?
> Or maybe, poor dear, her mother
> died so many years ago, leaving her
> with her sensitive and shattered
> father, who only sees his dead wife's
> eyes when he look at his daughter,
> and doesn't notice the manmade color of
> her tresses.
> Or maybe, her mother, being the
> eccentric type, still alive, divorced
> from a sensitive and shattered husband,
> approves of this bottled shade,
> and doesn't mind that her pale sick
> daughter is on fire?
>

Hehe. I like this one. Sounds like a description of me and my hair.


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>
> ok, another one...this one rhymes :)
>
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>
> as the news his lips delivered
> sank into my stubborn head,
> i felt i'd lain on goose-down pillows
> and found them all of quills instead.


Short and sweet, and to the point. Plus, it rhymes, that's always a bonus in my book!


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> can you stand one more?
>
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> I like mad seas
> and storm sky moons.
> Why then must you bring me
> thousands of gorgeous diamonds?
> Why have you placed them here at my feet?
> I do not want them there.


I like this one too, but I wish it had more. Of course in poetry, slight mystery is a good thing.


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>
> Ok, tell me what you think. Good. Bad. Tone. Word choice. Meaning. "Shut up". Whatever....
>
> Thanks!
>
> Gr"be honest, you won't hurt my feelings"ace

Ok, well, I'm not the best person to judge poetry, because I'm not an English Lit. major like half the people here. BUT, I do know what I like when I see it, and I like your poems. They remind me of things I've written before. Maybe I should post some. Or not.

Hey Sam, maybe we could have a poetry page that reader's could submit to? It's just a suggestion, but I think that a lot of people here have strong writing talents (as seen by the story posts) and you might have a good collection.

fam 'Ok, I'm done now." ous